Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
P1:
People have different views on children should be taught to be competitive or co-operative, while a sprite of competition can sometimes be very useful, I believe that the ability to cooperate is more important.
P1 Note:
People have different views on
while ...... , I believe that ......
a sprite of competition
can sometimes be useful
the ability to cooperate
P2:
On the one hand, competition can a great source of motivation for children.
When teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into pupils, it can encourage children to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class. This healthy rivalry may help to build children's self-confidence, while pushing them to work independently or progress more quickly.
When these children leave school, their confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations such as job interviews.
It can therefore be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to prepare children for adult life.
P2 Notes:
a great source of
introduce ...... into ......
an element of competitiveness
it can ......
outdo
rivalry
may / might / perhaps
push them to work independently
progress more quickly
it can therefore be argued that
in order to
prepare children for adult life
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P3 :
On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to prepare children for the many aspects of adult life that require co-operation.
In the workplace, adults are expected to work in teams, follow instructions given by superiors, supervise and support the more junior members of staff. Team collaboration skills are much more useful than a competitive determination to win. This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people.
Instead of promoting the idea that people are winners or losers, teachers could show children that they gain more from working together.
P3 Notes:
many aspects of
workplace
be expected to
team collaboration skills
a competitive determination to win
this is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people.
instead of
promote ideas
gain
P4:
In conclusion, I understand why people might want to encourage competitiveness in children, but it seems to me that a co-operative attitude is much more desirable in adult life.
P4 Notes:
might
encourage competitiveness in children
it seems to me that
a co-operative attitude
desirable
in adult life
