玲玲英语写作营 week 7复盘

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本周主题:Judging the appearance

第一篇:黎爱云Inner beauty and outer beauty

When I was young, I was always told that never judge a person by his or her appearance for the reason that inner beauty is more important. At that time I didn’t quite understand that word. Now, however, I have a further understanding about appearance as I grow older.

In my daily life, I never judge a book byits cover and I take it for granted that others are the same as me because I hold the belief that what our ancestors passed down to us is always right. Yes,actually it is right. But does it mean that we should not pay attention to our appearance?Apparently , the answer is no. On the contrary, we should pay more attention to it.Speaking of which, maybe you will say physical beauty is by birth that we can not change unless we try to do so by doing plastic surgery.I have to say you misunderstood what I mean. Iam not trying to debase the importance of inner beauty, what I want to emphasize is that physical beauty coexists with inner beauty.

As we all know, in real life, owning a charming face will help us to get access to more opportunities to get what we want because this is an era that everyone pursues beauty and there is no doubt that beauty makes us happy. If we have a chance to become more beautiful and charming, why not have a try? Of course I am not advocating plastic surgery. I mean at least we should wear neatly and orderly which makes us look morespiritual. What’s more,wereyou a girl, you had better put on light make-up that makes you look more natural. Last but not least, make sure youstay in shape because a good figure will makes you look more charming.

Ofcourse, we should not overlook our inner beauty . Therefore, we also need to cultivate our inner beauty while we pay attention to our appearance. Remember,to be a better self, both inner beauty and outer beauty. Both are equally ofgreat significance.

第二篇:林燕玲 Why does my attitude towards appearance change?

第三篇:陈思欣




第四篇:陈佳丽  My Plan

After the new term begins,I made up my mind to study hard and make progress every day.

Firstly,I need to prepare the text. Knowing the text in advance can help me understand the knowledge easily.

Secondly, I should listen to theteachers attentively, asking question when I don not understand the language point.

At last,I need to finish my homework and review my study contents.I should pay attention to what I don’t understand.

Come on! You've got to suffer a little to be successful.

第五篇:任玉海

In our life, good appearance can leave others a good impression and add to the total score of your comprehensive quality owing to extreme importance of the first impression, but if you don't have a good connotation or ability that can let others confirm you,the good impression left by appearance won't remain a long time. Even if aperson is extremely beautiful, there will be one day she gets old and ugly astime goes on, only the inner beauty won't change and the beauty of heart will last forever, which is the permanent beauty.

So owing a good appearance is probably a good thing, but without it is not a tragedy, a person's identity is more determined by his inner cultivation and quality. Whatweshould do is to work hard to improve our inner beauty, and strengthen our courage to face difficulties with optimism.  A powerful heart and a solid knowledge foundation of a person will let you receive more respect which can last for ever.

In conclusion, a person's appearance cannot decide what his position or identity is. In this world, one’s intrinsic training and comprehensive strength is more important than good appearance;only in this way can a person  live with "real beauty".

第六篇:王雪梅  原文链接The most beautiful seven years

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It's such an honor and a pleasure to write down these words and encounter the most beautiful of you!

It's 9:00 pm.Until now I haven’t set about writing my English article which Miss Lin assigned to us last Monday.Actually, l had thought of the uncompleted task allthrough the last few days . Whereas, I put off it to the deadline on account of my poor executive force.

Why did this situation appear? I think one of a vital factor is my fear of writing in English which can not be neglected. I know that my English expression is too straight to be line with the original habits.

Nevertheless, It's a strong need for me touse English and I strive to be accustomed tobringingitinto my life, especially in writing and speaking.

The topic of this week is Judging theAppearance. I carefully read the relevant articles that Miss Lin sent to us.What impressed me most wasone of the articlesshewrote.Attach the article link: Why does my attitude towards appearance change?It mainly told us that her attitude towards appearance changed due to some of her own experience. She gave an example that the doctor's attitude towards her changed because of her two different images when she took her daughter to hospital. As a result, she was inspired by this incident and gave us some advice on how to become more beautiful from the following aspects: smile, skin, makeup, hair, clothes, drinking water, exercise, posture and attitude. After reading this, I also more understand the beauty of both inside and outside is indispensable.

At the beginning of this article, the author wrote "I am not a lady from a decent family, who isfair-skinned and attractive ".So do I. But the real thing I want to say isthat she is a perfect lady as far as I can see. Whatmake me admire most about her is her diligence and persistence to study andearnest to teaching work. It's a good practice of the idea of lifelong learning showing from her.

She is a few years older than me and has more experience because she was already married and had a lovely girl.  I can feel her responsibility, mildness and warmth. She is a great teacher and is bound to be a great mother.  And I hope to write English articles with her in the next seven years.

On the way to growth, you will meet someone you like and appreciate. Cherish her/him and have a good effort together.

In the end, I want to say to all of you in 007–

It's such an honor and a pleasure toencounter the most beautiful of you in the most beautiful seven years. I am deeply obliged to you for all of your companion.


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